[IELTS WRITING 정복기] Transcribing model essay to my note -4
Some people believe advertising causes more harm than good to society. Others refute this. Discuss both views and share your opinion.
One of the main stimulatants of consumerism within a country is advertising. As such, advertising can be seen as a necessary practice withing any healthy economy. But often people counter this by saying that too much exposure to commercial promotions can cause societal problems.
On the one hand, advertising stimulates healthy spending, which can grow economies and create jobs. Take Coca-cola, for example. Coca-cola is a company that spends massive amounts on marketing every year. Because of this, it has become a brand that is recognized in the most remote cornor of the earth. This level of recognition allows even the smallest vendors anywhere in the world to create wealth through providing an attractice product with a powerful brand to potential customers. Thus, it is understandable why many people believe the benefits of advertising outweigh the drawbacks.
On the other hand, it is purported by many that advertising has negative ramifications on societies. For example, at Christmas time, American children are often the target of very elaborate marketing schemes hatched by large companies looking for holiday sales. As these sorts of campaings can induce children to become overly concerned with commercial matter, many people worry this may interrupt their development as moral people. When seen in this light, it is clear why many people feel there are more drawbacks than benefit to advertising.
Following this look at both sides of the above debate, it is felt that advertising is much more positive than negative in nauture. It is thus expected that the role of marketing within modern economies will not change much into the foreseeable future.
개인적으로, 정말 이 에세이.. 그지 같다고 느낀다... 내가 그렇게 느끼면 대부분 좋은 글이긴 하더라...
5일째 필사중 느낀건.. 손가락이 아프다는것과 이렇게 오래 했는데도 별 나아진다는 느낌이 없다는것... 물론 자력으로 글을 아직 안써서 모른다.
첨삭으로 재출한것도 아직 안왓고..
이것도 또 하나의 삽질이 되지 않기만을 바란다.
One of the main stimulatants of consumerism within a country is advertising. As such, advertising can be seen as a necessary practice withing any healthy economy. But often people counter this by saying that too much exposure to commercial promotions can cause societal problems.
On the one hand, advertising stimulates healthy spending, which can grow economies and create jobs. Take Coca-cola, for example. Coca-cola is a company that spends massive amounts on marketing every year. Because of this, it has become a brand that is recognized in the most remote cornor of the earth. This level of recognition allows even the smallest vendors anywhere in the world to create wealth through providing an attractice product with a powerful brand to potential customers. Thus, it is understandable why many people believe the benefits of advertising outweigh the drawbacks.
On the other hand, it is purported by many that advertising has negative ramifications on societies. For example, at Christmas time, American children are often the target of very elaborate marketing schemes hatched by large companies looking for holiday sales. As these sorts of campaings can induce children to become overly concerned with commercial matter, many people worry this may interrupt their development as moral people. When seen in this light, it is clear why many people feel there are more drawbacks than benefit to advertising.
Following this look at both sides of the above debate, it is felt that advertising is much more positive than negative in nauture. It is thus expected that the role of marketing within modern economies will not change much into the foreseeable future.
개인적으로, 정말 이 에세이.. 그지 같다고 느낀다... 내가 그렇게 느끼면 대부분 좋은 글이긴 하더라...
5일째 필사중 느낀건.. 손가락이 아프다는것과 이렇게 오래 했는데도 별 나아진다는 느낌이 없다는것... 물론 자력으로 글을 아직 안써서 모른다.
첨삭으로 재출한것도 아직 안왓고..
이것도 또 하나의 삽질이 되지 않기만을 바란다.
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